Buzzard

Friday Fictioneers is the brainchild of Madison Woods who posts a photo prompt each Friday to inspire followers to write a piece of flash fiction. After observing Rich participate I decided before I read his work, to see if anything was lurking in the depths of my imagination that wanted out, and Voila here it is, slightly longer at 150 words, but I’m ok with that.

    

A Man’s Best Friend

What’s she called?
Buzzard.

Buzzard? As in bird?
Yeh mate, Buzzard.

Bit strange for a dog don’t you think?

If I thought it was strange I’d have called her Bud, wouldn’t I?

Yeh, I guess.
Come on then, you gonna give me a hand or not. You get the front and take it slow down them stairs, I got the back. And no chat, I don’t want nosy neighbours asking stuff ‘ll give us more to do.

The two men lifted the long rectangular box off the table and walked towards the front door of the near empty apartment. Descending the stairs, they kept the deadweight container level until they got outside then slid it into the back of the waiting yute.

But where did you get Buzzard from?

Easy, wasn’t it. Last thing I saw before I picked up the body. That and the dog. So you gonna drive or me?

89 thoughts on “Buzzard

    • It pays not to think too much about it, I wrote this after seeing the prompt before the intellect could put fear into the subconscious.

      I would suggest you have a go, except that if you start creating as well as reading on the job, the poor dog may never get a walk.

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  1. An intriguing tale that leaves me wondering who is in the box, did the dog belong to the deceased, is this guy an undertaker? I love the mystery, good take on this prompt!

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    • Thank you, I’m not sure he is an offical, I’d need to write a little more before he would really reveal himself or the man in the box, but I too love how stories start this way, keeping me as much in the dark as everyone else.

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  2. In my mind I thought, “are these dudes body snatchers??” it was followed by the thought that either the dog just lost its owner and that’s why it was hanging around or it was as much a scavenger as the bird. Nice nice

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  3. What I enjoy about these writing challenges is how it shapes our writer’s mind to weld the pen (or keypad). And your comment above, about writing on instinct and not analyzing is the best way to go (my opinion). As for the post, a creative response to the visual, which you made stronger with the dialogue.

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  4. I made it, Claire, and I’m glad I did. You did a unique job. Sounds like both you and I have questions about this one and probably different answers! I had to read it several times, too. Good job!

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  5. I’m immediately thinking NYC or Chicago “Mafia”… and the little guys who are hired to clean up their messes. lol.
    ps: Love your adorable “pixie” profile pose… and…tks for visiting mine.

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    • Thank you very much indeed for the compliment. I have never written a film script, though I see things before I write them and like to write in a way to make the reader experience something. I did start to try and write how I thought my novel might start as a film once which I loved doing.

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    • Interesting comment, as readers we interpret what we think is happening, we use our imagination when information is lacking. The possibility remains that these two could in fact be the good guys. But you are right, it is also possible that there are some disturbing characters out there, they have already decided and will reveal themselves little by little. Thanks so much for stopping by Rochelle.

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  6. Interesting that Buzzard, the dog, is a she–and that the box with the body is in a “near empty apartment” in a desolate location (suggested by photo). Lots of possibilities here–you really should try to develop this further.

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    • Love that comment, it reminds me of my younger self in school when choosing subjects, always choosing the least restrictive path, the one that left all the options open for taking another route. Despite suggestions to the contrary, its not clear whether they are legitimate or not either.

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    • Hi Doug, Glad you made it this far, what a whirlwind Friday, such fun participating and loved this prompt, it really shows what’s possible in the first 150 words. Thanks for the encouraging comments. Claire

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  7. Wow. Very effectively creepy. Are they murderers disposing of the body, or undertakers taking charge of someone who was found dead? In either case, the second man’s comments about his dog draw him as someone I wouldn’t want to spend much time with.

    Good dialog and well written – congratulations!

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  8. I really enjoyed this. An intriguing snapshot of what could be a very compelling world. Great characterization as well as the touch of mystery. Are they burkers or something even more sinister?

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  9. I enjoyed reading this.
    An interesting and intriguing piece. lots of questions kept opting into my head.
    I thought the ending was both sinister and mysterious.
    A great read – thanks.

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    • Not too sure who actually killed him, we only know who picked the body up and what he saw, loving what the imagination of readers is offering, thank you so much for reading, commenting and sharing. Bonne continuation.

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    • Thanks for spotting the mistake Russell, that must have happened when I was hopelessly trying to indent the dialogue to separate it from the narrative text. Good on you for picking that up, have rectified it now. Thank you for persevering and sorry about the confusion, its confusing enough calling a dog Buzzard and there being a buzzard in the story:)

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  10. Hi Claire,
    You plunged me immediately into some dark and mysterious world, and I was trying to figure it all out right up until the end, and after.
    Great storytelling. Thanks for reading and commenting on my story.
    Ron

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  11. LOVED it! Just love shorts that leave ya with just enough of the image to be affected. What a fun and creepy impact! Shared it with my boyfriend, who is the fiction writer of the household. We both cringed with delight. Thanks for sharing.

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    • It was fun to write a spontaneous piece to a visual prompt and I was surprised by what came out, but I’d just finished reading a Cormac McCarthy book and felt like I was still in those territories he inhabits, both physically and through language. Thanks for reading it:)

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